Tuesday, August 5, 2014

Turning around

If you have missed the first chapter of this story you can catch it on Sunday Fiction

Bruce could not believe what he was seeing. He turned from one side to the other just to see how large the land mass was, but there was no real way of telling. It did not appear as if there was any end to it. He raced back downstairs in order to find his parents. He knew that they had to be there somewhere.

Searching under all of the displaced clothes, the tousled table and disarray of pots and pans he discovered nothing. Then he decided to undo the bunk in the front in the far chance hope that his parents had secured themselves in for safety. Bringing the bed down his father rolled out onto the floor. It was blatantly obvious that he was dead. Bruce's heart sank in his chest, but he still held out hope that perhaps his mother was still alive.

Opening the bed to it's entire size, Nicole was crushed in the back corner. "Mom!" Bruce said as he climbed up on the bed. He reached her within seconds and saw that she was breathing. Gently shaking her Bruce tried to rouse his mother. Her eyelids began to flutter and slowly opened. Nicole gradually focused on her son and smiled. She was still quite weak but she was alive.

"Mom, we are very close to land," Bruce said. "The boat is completely disheveled, the sails are tattered and the rigging is loose, but we haven't taken on any water. I really think that if we can make it to land we might be able to find some food and water."

"That's nice," Nicole said turning over.

"Mom, I need you to get off of this bed and help me. I think that together we can do this."

to be continued....

Linking up with my friend Josie at Two Shoes Tuesday where today's prompts were turning or tattered.


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11 comments:

  1. I think you may have the cliffhanger down to an art... are you writing this as you go along or do you have some idea of where youre going with it? just wondering! :)

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    1. :) I have no idea what is coming next!!

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  2. ^^^ I agree!! these cliff hangers are killing me!! LOL
    At least his dear mom is okay - at this point. So.. will it be an island, or actual land somewhere???

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    1. Stay tuned.... you'll find out when I do.... did you catch the whole first part (there was a lot added on Sunday!)

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    2. Yep! I went back and reread from beginning to refresh my memory. keep it coming! :)

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  3. Your story is getting more and more interesting.

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  4. Thanks, Brenda....we will all be watching for the next episode!

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  5. Yes, you do tease us so with your writing. We hardly have time to recall the last chapter when you leave us stranded (marooned perhaps is the right word) again. Now for the wait for the next chapter.

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  6. Oh this is good! I love the humanity you are writing into it, and I find myself breathing a sigh of relief that at least one member of Bruce's family still lives to embark on this new adventure with him. And how well I could relate to the mother who wanted to roll over and turn away from the horror that has taken possession of their lives. This is a truly good, suspenseful story in the making, and I'm cheering for them all the way! Not to mention how delighted I am to see you doing what you do so well... and love so much... WRITING! GO BRENDA! :-) <3

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